This page lists the most popular services. Contact me for any tailored service.
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1. Story Diagnosis ($99)
Story and character analysis, discussed during a 1hr recorded Skype session, covering aspects of concept, story, characters and structure. Based on a one-page synopsis and logline.
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2. Script Review ($550)
Full script analysis, discussed during a phone/Skype story clinic on story, character, style and format, feedback on your logline and recommendations for the next draft.
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- Audio Recording: Every Skype session is recorded and made available to you as .mp3 or .aac. This is a free service, but not guaranteed (over hundreds of hours of consults, only fourteen minutes have ever been found corrupted)
- Face-to-face: Where a service only includes a phone consultation, you can meet me in person at a mutually convenient place at $75 additional to the standard fee.
- Expedited: If you need urgent feedback and a faster turnaround, this can usually be arranged at an additional 50%. For our 24 hours service, a 75% markup applies.
- Written Notes: Most services are interactive. Any advice depends on our discussion. If you need notes and they are not included, tell me what you need, at $55 p/p.
- Jumbo Scripts: If the page count of your feature screenplay is over 110 pages (it shouldn’t), I charge an additional $5 per page to help you come to your senses.
- I lecture about filmmaking, visual storytelling and screenwriting.
- I advise on dramatic film projects in production and post-production.
- I mentor young filmmakers, sharing experience of over 20 years in the media.
For any of these services, send me an email via the contact page or give me a call. I am happy to travel worldwide if you make it worth my while.
You can now also hire me via the Australian Writers Guild. As the Guild works with a pool of consultants, you will need to expressly ask that Karel reviews your work. Before contacting the Guild, feel free to contact us first.
Download the AWG Booking Form here.
The Story Department offers its clients a premium service, unequaled by other consultants. The following extras are included at no additional cost (*):
Recording of telephone sessions to mp3.
Secure private web page with a backup of your documents.
Instructions on format and style, do’s and don’ts etc.
(*) Contact me for details and ask me if you need any of these included.
If you’re serious about scriptwriting, a consultation with Karel is invaluable. -Annie Cossins
“If you’re serious about scriptwriting, a consultation with Karel is invaluable. I had gone as far as I thought I could go with my script – Karel’s analysis gave me ideas I couldn’t see myself and set me on a new path towards writing the best script possible.” – Annie Cossins Writer/Producer ________________________
I’m happy to report the script has won the 2007 Monte Miller award. -Nathan Fielding
“I came to you with a bunch of scenes in the hope of finding a story and when I look back now at that very rough draft I’m still surprised at how far we have come. You always brought such a clear and constructive perspective to our meetings, telephone conversations and even my boozy emails. To be able to sit down and work one on one with you has helped me not only write this story, but to acquire skills that I’ll take to future projects. I always left our meetings with not only a clearer understanding of my own writing, but with renewed energy and inspiration to push myself further. I can’t thank you enough for your time, patience, good humour and genuine enthusiasm you show for your craft. Now I’m happy to report the script has won the 2007 Monte Miller award (just as we had planned). Thanks again Karel. I’ll get to work on another oddly thrown together bunch of characters and give you a call. I know you love a challenge. Cheers.” -Nathan Fielding, “Little Things”, Winner Monte Miller Award 2007 ________________________
Karel’s advice is backed up with examples, and our discussions have ranged from “Schindler’s List” to “Toy Story”. -Jack Brislee
“Karel has thoroughly analysed my script and synopsis and provided excellent advice. He draws on a vast fund of film knowledge and years of screenplay analysis. Karel tactfully showed me the areas in my script where drama was lacking and provided insightful suggestions for improvements. By concentrating first on the synopsis he is able to find the strengths and weaknesses in the story structure. By taking Karel’s advice I found the character arcs and dialogue flowed naturally and logically and my script was a vast improvement on the original. Karel’s advice is backed up with examples, and our discussions have ranged from “Schindler’s List” to “Toy Story”. Because he is a true film aficionado and a first class script analyst, Karel was able to bring the best out of my script. I strongly recommend Karel’s service to all script writers.” -Jack Brislee,Chairman Australian Writers Guild NSW Associates Committee ________________________ “What Karel is offering is an essential first step in a successful script. Structure is everything. If you don’t have that right, your screenplay will never be green lighted. Karel’s service is unique and everything else, including a screenplay editor is ‘cart before the horse.” -Anny Slater Award-winning Screenwriter Principal of Moondance Pictures ________________________
He is a rare beast amongst story consultants – a film literate and long-standing aficionado of many film genres. -Kieran Galvin
“Karel has provided excellent feedback on my screenplays. Always a ‘big picture’ guy he never loses sight of the overall thrust of the story, the narrative truths and the importance of character and he never gets distracted with the little stuff that tends to fix itself when the important parts are working harmoniously. I’ve always found Karel to be wonderfully enthusiastic and quick with feedback. He’s honest and pragmatic but he knows the story is yours and he doesn’t try to rewrite it the way some editors can become fixated with shaping the story the way they would tell it. He is a rare beast amongst story consultants – a film literate and long-standing aficionado of many film genres. I hold Karel in very high regard.” -Kieran Galvin Writer / Director PUPPY Writer FEED ________________________
Even after having had the script (5th draft) edited by my agent and the AWG service, you have been the first to really understand what I’m on about here. -Andy Otes
“Even after having had the script (5th draft) edited by my agent and the AWG service, you have been the first to really understand what I’m on about here. Not only did you make extremely insightful comments and suggestions, picking up structural shortcomings, you pointed me in a direction that hadn’t occurred to me: a love story rather than a routine crime movie, in which form it would have limited potential.” - Andy Otes Professional Copywriter ________________________
I am now sending my pitches to Hollywood. -Elizabeth Ban
“For the past two years I have been slaving away at my sci-fi screenplay that I was sure to sell to major producers. It had a great story line, amazing aliens and believable human characters. Confident of success, I submitted the opus to the NSW FTO’s New Writers’ Scheme. Lo and behold, they had a lot of good things to say about the film, but someone else impressed them more, and I was left with my ego hanging out to dry. A few months later I took my courage in hand and re-read the screenplay. It read great, it was moving, the turning points were believable – until I hit page 80. Even I could tell that the story died, right there and then. What to do? Enter Karel Segers of Ozzywood Films and his incredible insights into story structure. After reading my synopsis, Karel gave me a detailed analysis of where the structure is deficient and why the story died exactly on page 80. His analysis was along the same lines as the one from the NSWFTO, but he was more thorough and the face-to-face dialogue helped to pinpoint exactly the deficient elements of structure. I am now sending my pitches to Hollywood and am delighted to have this opportunity to recommend Karel to anyone whose story structure needs a bit of TLC. Karel is definitely the doctor to consult.” -Elizabeth Ban Writer / Journalist ________________________
Karel’s understanding of film markets and production is an added bonus. -Wojciech Wawrzyniak
“The service Karel provides is filled with thorough and honest feedback that genuinely helps to develop and construct a solid and refined story. Coming with years of script analysis experience, Karel’s constant care and advice on the content of the story helped establish the timing of its events and the unfolding of its featured character arcs to their full potential. Any writer would be a fool not to take unbiased, constructive comments that help them build a better, more powerful story. Karel’s understanding of film markets and production is an added bonus that helps the script become not only powerfully structured, but also audience friendly without losing its intent and integrity. Reading back my initial, pre-consulted draft, I do not know where I would have been without this service to help make it the ripper of a story that it is now. Thank you for helping me become a better writer! I recommend anyone else out there trying to get their material seen to do the same.” - Wojciech Wawrzyniak Writer/Director ________________________ “I write for the love of creating and telling original stories. The stories roll along with good characters and dialogue, with twists and turns, perhaps a hint of the supernatural or a smattering of comedic one liners, which is all well and good if you just want to write a story for your own entertainment. But, thanks to Karel, I realise that a good script, a great script, has to be more than that. His wealth of experience, understanding and intuitive feel for structure, coupled with a steady hand on his ‘script scalpel’, can reshape a good story into a structured script that continually drives the story forward which, as sure we’re all aware, is what a producer wants to see in a script.” -Andy Hartley Writer ________________________ “My writing partner and I approached Karel with an outline for a Narrative Comedy we had been developing. Whilst we were happy with our work, we knew it had to be critiqued by a professional before we even thought about approaching funding bodies. Karel effectively guided us on story structure and character development which gave us a great insight on how to improve our work. He was generous with his time and was a real pleasure to work with. Thanks to his feedback, we now feel we have an even greater chance at succeeding in this competitive industry.” -Christopher Kezelos Writer/Director Founder of Virtuactive ________________________
You’d be doing yourself a big favour by contacting Karel with your synopsis before you sit down to write that 120 page dream. -Harry Gorry
“I’d recommend Karel to anyone serious about screenwriting. His clear, detailed and empathetic approach brought clarity and purpose to a story in need of his professional service. You’d be doing yourself a big favour by contacting Karel with your synopsis before you sit down to write that 120 page dream. His skills just might save you considerable time and get you thinking outside the square.” -Harry Gorry Screenwriter ________________________
I have to tell you that you are the first person to really attack the story but also offer suggestions for fixing it. -Megan Shields
“Thank you so much for the invaluable feedback you offered me today. I am thinking in new terms now and am excited that the stories will be reignited. I have to tell you that you are the first person to really attack the story but also offer suggestions for fixing it.” -Megan Shields ________________________
You were inspirational. -Ly De Angeles
“At first I was frustrated. I couldn’t see. I re-wrote the synopsis and ended up with 4 pages. I knew I didn’t have it. Then tonight your words sank in. I forced myself to look at Rose through really honest eyes. And . . .? I love you I love you I love you! I haven’t gone back to the synopsis. I don’t care right now. And I haven’t typed up what I wrote; it’s hand-written. I phoned my daughter who is the co-writer and she said “Mama, you’ve just written me.” It’s the lonely way of artistic people in a banal world. You were inspirational. Challenge does it for me every time.” -Ly de Angeles Published Author www.lydeangeles.com ________________________
I give Karel Segers my highest recommendation. -Steen Marcussen
When was the last time you truly got value for money? When did you last receive: * Exceptional competence and diligence. * Honesty. * Quick and efficient turn-around service on all work. * Dynamic attention to all details. * Guidance of high calibre to improve your own writing style. * Talented editing. * Excellent value for money. If you want all of the above, you cannot go wrong in contacting Karel Segers, a man who delivers! A man of his word, and a tremendous help to any writer who seeks excellence in script-writing or guidance to self-improvement. I give Karel Segers my highest recommendation. Steen Marcussen Author of “2000 Carats” “Africa Go Go” ________________________ “Karel Segers brilliantly conveys the best of what is currently understood about effective story telling for the cinema. His method of teaching is highly responsive, vividly supported by carefully selected visuals, and, best of all, witty and memorable.” -Ron Cobb Concept Artist, Writer, Director
“I attended a course of Karel’s in 2007 and two years later the details of what I learned have stayed with me. I catch myself automatically observing films and reading books using the critical tools I learned from Karel, and most importantly – how a story could be improved.” -Marcus Amann Professional Writer “I enjoyed the day enormously and thought you were just wonderful. My knowledge and understanding of films was expanded enormously, and many things I understood instinctively but had never heard articulated about the art of storytelling were nailed firmly in place. It was fantastic!” -Kate Forsyth Best-selling Author ‘Witches of Eileanan’ “Karel is the new breed of Teachers who not only conveys the technicality so effortlessly, but makes you want to write your story. He is passionate, focused and he knows his stuff. Karel you Rock, dude!” -Gerard John Producer / Entrepreneur “I came to you with a bunch of scenes in the hope of finding a story and when I look back I’m still surprised at how far we have come. Now the script has won the 2007 Monte Miller award. Thanks again Karel.” -Nathan Fielding Winner 2007 AWG Monte Miller Award “He never gets distracted with the little stuff that tends to fix itself when the important parts are working harmoniously. Karel is a rare beast amongst story consultants – a film literate and long-standing aficionado of many film genres. I hold Karel in very high regard.” -Kieran Galvin Film Director / Screenwriter “Karel is my go-to guy for Script Development and/or assessment. He has a unique insight into the process and any projects I bring him are always infinitely improved by the time we have finished. His grasp of story and structure is second to none. I have recommended his services to several colleagues in the past, all of whom have been very satisfied with the results.” – Michael Favelle International Sales Agent Top 10 Person to Watch in 2009 “Karel Segers is Australia’s Robert McKee” – Stephen J De Jager Creative Director,Roadshow Entertainment